MIA leaflet
Welcome to Marco Island Academy
Looking for a fresh start? Marco Island Academy is a place where you can find new opportunities. This may seem scary at first, but soon enough you will find out that everyone is a big family. The faculty and students are very supportive and always there to help.
Knowing the Campus
Not knowing where to go on the first day is always a struggle. Most of the students on the first day will be running around trying to find their classes even if they aren’t new. Some pointers to not getting lost are: the third floor is science and math, second is art and english, first is history and language and the lookout lounge (lunch area) is on the third floor straight back. Everything will come with time. Don’t be scared to ask a student or teacher for help if you do find yourself getting lost.
Sports and Activities
Want to be involved in the school? Marco Island Academy has many clubs, volunteer opportunities, and sports to offer. The main clubs and organizations at the school are key club, interact, student government, science and spanish national honor society, theatre, and many more. Our school has any club you could imagine and if we don’t you can make it! Clubs are a great way to make new friends, sports too. We have soccer, volleyball, baseball, football, basketball, and if we don’t have a sport you can play for your zoned school.
Academics
MIA offers a well-rounded education program to the students. We are a small school which allows the teachers to understand their students strengths and weaknesses. The education is strong on STEM (science, technology engineering and mathematics), but it also includes Performing Arts, English, History and others. We offer students the opportunity to be involved in the Cambridge Aice Honors Program. This offers students many opportunities to further and advance their education. It also qualifies students for the Florida Academic Bright Futures Scholarship.
My aim in this leaflet was to make the incoming students to feel comfortable and knowledgeable about the school. Because it was a leaflet, I separated the key points make it simpler to read. By separating the information it would allow the reader to focus on one idea at a time. I used sub-headings to grab the reader's attention and divide the information in sections. I used simple sentences in my text to be straightforward with what I was talking about. The few sentence paragraphs were short and easy to follow as well. A leaflet is short and doesn’t need extra information that isn’t needed. I wanted to make the leaflet easy to follow and precise.
To engage the reader in the writing I asked rhetorical questions at the start of some of the sections. Asking these rhetorical questions makes the reader pause and think about the question. I also tried to relate or sympathize with the reader by saying ‘this may seem scary’ and ‘the first day is always a struggle’. Relating to the reader would make them feel more comfortable as they aren’t alone in this situation.
The use of lists and giving information about the school gives the reader more information about the school. By giving the reader information in lists it shows the amount of opportunities the school has. This way the reader can see that their will be something that they have interest in. Or may find a new interest in as they discover new clubs and activities. By showing the many opportunities the school offers the student won’t feel out of place. The main idea was to make sure the students started to feel more comfortable while they read along the leaflet.
Looking for a fresh start? Marco Island Academy is a place where you can find new opportunities. This may seem scary at first, but soon enough you will find out that everyone is a big family. The faculty and students are very supportive and always there to help.
Knowing the Campus
Not knowing where to go on the first day is always a struggle. Most of the students on the first day will be running around trying to find their classes even if they aren’t new. Some pointers to not getting lost are: the third floor is science and math, second is art and english, first is history and language and the lookout lounge (lunch area) is on the third floor straight back. Everything will come with time. Don’t be scared to ask a student or teacher for help if you do find yourself getting lost.
Sports and Activities
Want to be involved in the school? Marco Island Academy has many clubs, volunteer opportunities, and sports to offer. The main clubs and organizations at the school are key club, interact, student government, science and spanish national honor society, theatre, and many more. Our school has any club you could imagine and if we don’t you can make it! Clubs are a great way to make new friends, sports too. We have soccer, volleyball, baseball, football, basketball, and if we don’t have a sport you can play for your zoned school.
Academics
MIA offers a well-rounded education program to the students. We are a small school which allows the teachers to understand their students strengths and weaknesses. The education is strong on STEM (science, technology engineering and mathematics), but it also includes Performing Arts, English, History and others. We offer students the opportunity to be involved in the Cambridge Aice Honors Program. This offers students many opportunities to further and advance their education. It also qualifies students for the Florida Academic Bright Futures Scholarship.
My aim in this leaflet was to make the incoming students to feel comfortable and knowledgeable about the school. Because it was a leaflet, I separated the key points make it simpler to read. By separating the information it would allow the reader to focus on one idea at a time. I used sub-headings to grab the reader's attention and divide the information in sections. I used simple sentences in my text to be straightforward with what I was talking about. The few sentence paragraphs were short and easy to follow as well. A leaflet is short and doesn’t need extra information that isn’t needed. I wanted to make the leaflet easy to follow and precise.
To engage the reader in the writing I asked rhetorical questions at the start of some of the sections. Asking these rhetorical questions makes the reader pause and think about the question. I also tried to relate or sympathize with the reader by saying ‘this may seem scary’ and ‘the first day is always a struggle’. Relating to the reader would make them feel more comfortable as they aren’t alone in this situation.
The use of lists and giving information about the school gives the reader more information about the school. By giving the reader information in lists it shows the amount of opportunities the school has. This way the reader can see that their will be something that they have interest in. Or may find a new interest in as they discover new clubs and activities. By showing the many opportunities the school offers the student won’t feel out of place. The main idea was to make sure the students started to feel more comfortable while they read along the leaflet.
AO2: 9 Marks
ReplyDeleteAs I read your leaflet, I felt as if I was being given a personal guide to the school. You had a clear expression throughout your response, which also included a diverse language range along with some complex structures and less common lexis. I did not see any instance in which there was repetition in your response. I did see very minimal and very occasional errors, being punctuation errors, that did not impede your though flow in any way but I think they do need to be mentioned. They do not impede communication though as they are extremely minimal. Overall, your response is organized in an extremely clear manner and this allows your ideas to be seen as clearly developed. If this actually was a leaflet, it would be a very reader-friendly leaflet. However, one part under the 'Knowing the campus' heading stands out to me. When you list out what each of the floors in the building feature, the structure of the long sentence is very awkward and can be a little confusing to follow. I see how you wanted to write that particular part, but I think that if it were structured a little better that it would be more appealing to the reader. Overall, your task was achieved as you did give advice and guidance to the student and included relevant content in your response as well. In starting off your response with a welcome paragraph, you addressed your audience clearly.
AO3: 6 Marks
This is definitely better than my commentary response in my blog. You had a very clear analysis of elements of form, structure and language that you used throughout your response to part A. You also used a buzz word (or phrase?) that would add a tick to your score; rhetorical questions. You didn't just state that you used them, you also explained how you did and why, which really helped strengthen your commentary. Further along when you discussed the comfort of the students reading it, I could see that you had a clear analysis of how you styled your response in part A to relate to the audience and shape the meaning of it. Like I said earlier, I honestly felt like I was being given a personal guide to the school. Good job!!!
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ReplyDeleteAO2: Level 4 (11 Marks); There is effective expression for the audience with some complex sentence structures although there is not really any less common lexis. There is also a high level of accuracy in the response since there are no errors. The text is also logically organized since the information is organized by importance and by subheadings. Your response also includes the typical structure of a leaflet such as the subheadings and short paragraphs. So the task is achieved well and all the content is relevant since it is related to the school. The audience is also engaged which is made possible by the somewhat formal language targeted at new students.
AO3: Level 1 (2 Marks); I gave this score because the word count was near 600 words so there would be a minimal analysis of form, structure and/or language AND a minimal analysis of how the writer’s stylistic choices relate to audience and shape meaning.
Total: 14 Marks
AO2- for this section, I will give you a score of 10 since off the rip you had me interested with the hook where you said “Looking for a fresh start?” this can add trust or the idea of a fresh start into the students mind and engage the audience off of the start, You also structured your leaflet very well and I felt like I was engaged the whole time and it didn't really get boring while reading it. You also mentioned idas and wrote a lot about them while not having much repetition at all which is very good.
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For this section, I will give you a score of 5 marks, You explained what you did and why you did it. For example you mentioned the form and talked about how you structured it in order to make it simpler and easier to understand and read. You also talked about the stylistic choices that you used through it like rhetorical questions and why u did that. You also mentioned keeping the leaflet short and to the point which is how they should be written and for this I give you a score of 5 marks